“How can I help you, ma’am?”, he asked the lady who was looking around with penetrating eyes.
“I’m not your regular customer. I’m here for ‘BID fareWELL Exchange” and he perceived from her meaningful tone that she ‘knew’.
He escorted her into the backend of the store into a dark room.
“It comes with a price. And it is not a bargain in terms of this world, girlie. Do you accept what might come?” said a voice from the dark.
With a nod of her head, she sealed the exchange.
One more day with him before he disappears where the dead go. .
As she exited, she danced for him again- the last time, she ever did.
Inspired by the photo prompt from Friday Fictioneers
Pilgrim of Cognition 
I really like the direction you took this in, very original.
Thank You ^_^
I think I want to know more Pilgrim. You leave a lot unanswered. Then again you could argue the success of your piece in having me write my first sentence. Leaving us wanting more is a great skill. Well done.
hahahha, I’m ever so glad that you enjoyed it. I have always loved stories that paint a picture but leave the details to your imagination. You get to decide the fate of the characters!
Yes I can, but it is irritating that I have to. The reader wants the writer to provide the answers, that you have succeeded in intriguing me is an excellent response from me.
hahahaha, I sort of do understand your agitation. Next time, maybe you will get a clearer picture!!
I was thinking about it and made me want to make the situation a little clearer… added a couple of words. . hope that helps
Such a unique interpretation. Like nothing else I have read so far.
Wow – my exchange gives them a 2nd chance at life and yours does too – in a different way, great read. The balloons on your page made that last dance even more of a celebration!
Glad you liked it !! 😀
Dear Pilgrim,
I cringe to think what she exchanged for one last dance. Good, if not disturbing, one.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Nice story. I think a deal like that would cost more than most people would be willing to give.
I think if the only thing we love dearly is taken away, we will be willing to consider all costs!!
Sounds like the classic deal with the devil, not a good choice to me. In your story, it’s up to the reader to decide why she made that bargain. You added intrigue by leaving so much to the imagination. The whole thing reminds me of a study I read about years ago, where athletes were asked whether they would take a pill that could make them the best in the world at their sport but would kill them in five years. Disturbingly, to me, at least, most said they would.
janet
Does it mean so many athletes put career before family? or desire to leave a mark on the world..ambition is always a powerful factor, I suppose! If I get a day with a loved one to say my goodbyes before Death snatches them away, I think I would take it!
Good question. I don’t recall. It could be a combination of both. As for one more day with a loved one, it would depend what I had to trade for it. There are costs that could be too high.
Oh this was dark.. and I think Faust immediately, and then the price was not worth it (except Faust made it in the end didn’t he?)
Faust was carried off to Hell by the Devil!
I Goethe’s version he was saved at the end… 🙂
Oh yes, Gretchen prays to Mary and granting the boon, Faust is allowed to go to higher spheres of heaven!
Your piece suggests darkness, mystery and death! Craftily done!
Thank You ^_^